another exterior (and final render)

[arqestevez1]

Hi... i had no time to finishi this for the contest, but i think that this would have been my second render...

[teofas]

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nice work omar, some feedback:

glass on the slide doors needs reflection, looks like there were no glass, also becarefull of the crispy edges on the door frame, the area of the bar looks too shiny, too bright a little burn, some parts of grass looks too flat maybe use another texture or displacement, water and lensflares looks awsome!
on last thing is the horizon, i think this can improve so much adding a background, maybe a field or mountains, or anything, cause in my opinion it looks like the hole model is in the air, the mood and the general ilu is very good. also you can add some components to add more life, even if its a small place maybe some more little objects can help, remember that small details make great renders... bottom line, with some more work this can be your best work so far. congrats!

[arqestevez1]

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thanks for the commens
printed version (en benavides) is really cool, but i'll keep working

[arqestevez1]

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something i made last night... i'm starting to think that night exteriors are actually easier... :P

[robert111]

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The second picture is very realistic , did you use ies lignt or omni light for this lamps?

[arqestevez1]

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non of them robert... do you see the small white point in the left bottom corner of the glass doors?
that's how the lamps actually look. i used an emitter material with a very low multiplier value. the glow comes from the post production process...
thank you for your comment ;D

[skurl]

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yes this last image is very realstic, nice work!!

[40th]

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First of all I think those are good images.
I agree with Teo on the first image comments. Even if you'll add underwater lights in the pool it'll upgrade the look.
The 2nd image has very good composition and I like the point of view.

Few things that I've notice:
1. The curve where the dark floor meets the white curve is too perfect. In real life it's never that perfect.
2. Something about the Lightning is not ending up. I think the scene is too dark in this sky light. Also there should be a bit bleu tint bouncing from the sky GI.
3. Last thing, is the palm tree on the left. It's too skinny for my taste

In all the images easily can go from good to great.
Keep on posting.

[arqestevez1]

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wow, really usefull comments. this is great cause i'm just about to print a "book" for my portfolio.
i'll keep all of this in mind. thank you all for your comments.

[arqestevez1]

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i had already made this before the last comments, there are a few color corrections and a bird eye's shot...
;D

[teofas]

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i like the birdeye render, it shows the beautyfull curve lines design. but to be totally honest lightning on the second one is weird even in this update i agree with ken comment

Something about the Lightning is not ending up. I think the scene is too dark in this sky light. Also there should be a bit bleu tint bouncing from the sky GI.

also the grass really needs some displacement....one more little thing about the glass material, in my opinion i like more the translucent one cause you can look inside the house, with this ones looks more like an office glass. its too dark.
anyway nice job bro!

[Roo Evans]

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Nice renders,
Your making some nice looking improvements in the newer ones, but if you'd allow me;

-The marble block wall could use some corrections as material and model, use some bump (and some slight specular reflections),
also in the bird's eye view you see the top of these walls are just plain white, make a border on top of it or something similar.

-As 40th already noted, the sky and render look odd, 'brightness'-wise.

-Try using ambient occlusion if you're using one of the newer vfsu versions

-Unfortunately the pool tiles look like a first pass render in the bird's view, but that's quite hard to avoid I guess.
Maybe rotating the texture could help.

Just my 2 cents, I still have a lot to learn myself so.. ;D

Cheers, keep it up!
Roo Evans

[arqestevez1]

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again, thank you for the comments. this is really valuable stuff... i'll keep all of this in mind for the next work ;D

[robert111]

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arqestevez, can you make your very good setting for the second picture and the seconde for your emissive lamp thanks
you are the best for exterior render at to moment

[Roo Evans]

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again, thank you for the comments. this is really valuable stuff... i'll keep all of this in mind for the next work ;D

Looking forward to it!

Cheers,
Roo Evans